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I sit, I think, I wonder why,
I cannot see inside your mind.
There’s something there, what can it be?
I wonder if you ever think of me.
I sit and stare, look deep in your eyes,
But what’s inside is all a surprise.
You mean so much to me, more than you’ll ever know,
But how you feel, you do not show.
It’s frustrating not knowing where I stand,
My emotions lying helpless in the palm of your hand.
I wish you would tell me the thoughts in you head.
Instead you just lay there, numb, in your bed.
You’re brilliant. You’re beautiful. A true work of art.
I just wish I could find a way to your heart.
Just to be near you, it makes my heart soar,
But when you cut yourself off is when my spirit drops to the floor.
I like you, I want you; don’t know what else to say.
Would you tell me what you’re feeling; I’ll be complete that way.

I think of you and wonder why
I can’t have you here by my side.
I look at you, you’re all I need
But all you want is to be freed.

I’m in love, you’re unaware
All I want to know is if you care.
What are we? I’m not sure.
I know we’re friends, but are we more.
©2004-2010 ~frizz57
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:iconrocketman22022:
Just an Idea but this would work great as Octo Sylabbic Couplets, that is how it starts
here is an example of how it would work

I sit, I think, I wonder why,
I cannot see inside your mind.
There’s something there, what can it be?
I wonder if you think of me.
I sit and stare deep in your eyes,
But what’s inside is a surprise.

It hurts not knowing where I stand,
My emotions lie there in your hand

see this way it flows great
that is how you started but you departed from it

Either way I liked your poem
:iconmocambo:
Beautiful poem, perfectly explains the situation I am in right now.
:iconutopie-mauve:
Brilliantly written. I think you've voiced very well the thoughts of so many people, myself included. Grand work!
:iconkitsunekarin:
Perfection, right on target for a ton of relationships around the world.

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No body is perfect; my left iris, for instance is 5 millimeters to the right of where it should be.
:icongr8lilchic:
Nyagh, lol, very appropriate for...very many people -_-
I know the feeling. Most certainly.

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I RP L on *Mello-x-Matt =)

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"Are you ready for me to thrust my co-...Er, I mean...make love to you?"

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"First I whip it out! Then I thrust it...With great force! Every angle..! It penetrates! Until...With great strength...! I...ram it in!"
:iconcrazytheinsane:
Wow. I love it. I usually am not fond of rhyming poems because oftentimes it detracts from the acutal strength of the words. But this is incredible. And so true.

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